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This dark cold night.

Post by BreeZaps on Sun Jan 13, 2013 1:20 am

We can post poems to right?
I just got banned from the SS forums. Here is my poem (it doesn't really rhyme)


I watch as the gate to the doors lock on me.
I start to cry and think "Why?" "Why did I do this?" "I know better."
I slowly get off my feet. And walk away. And start to cry.
On this dark cold night.
I start to walk to my forum home. Crying my eyes out.
I get there and see a friend. I hug him and slowly walk away with him.
On this dark cold night.

(This is bad xP My first poem)

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Re: This dark cold night.

Post by YYHD on Sun Jan 13, 2013 2:19 pm

could take work. not bad.

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Re: This dark cold night.

Post by Oshawottluv49 on Tue Jan 15, 2013 9:32 pm

Great first poem. It makes sense. Could use some details. And some poems don't rhyme but they are still good.

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